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Gala Gauthier's avatar

"As she left his cottage that night, Eliza realized the Old Scholar had given her something dangerous—an unaltered piece of the past, a truth that contradicted official history. She carried it carefully, like something that might shatter if examined too closely or burn if held too tight."

I know how that feels. pulling emotion from the fact our history is never what we think it is. It is well written, I love it.

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Mary Collins's avatar

This is very powerful. You can sense the dispair. Looking forward to more.

Paragraph 17, 5th line down, space after Thomas.

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Padraic Burns's avatar

I’m in the middle of reading it and had a question. Wasn’t sure where to ask it, this seemed more appropriate than under an unrelated YouTube video.

When the character Clara first appears in the woods she introduces herself as working in, “Eastern Mill, loom section five.” Eliza responds, “Eliza, Northern Mill, finishing department.” (p.40) a few pages later on p.44 it says, “Clara, who operated the loom beside Eliza’s, noticed the change anyway. They had worked by side for six years, …” There’s no indication if this is the same or different Clara, are there two Clara’s?

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Karlyn Borysenko's avatar

Same Clara but you found an inconsistency! I thought I got all of them. Thanks for pointing that out!

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